>Here's a stanza from MS Laud 615 that pads it out a bit:
>Cách a bfuil acat i tig
>etir ith is blicht is mil,
>nocha berair lat ar sét
>in tan racha d'éc, a fhir.
>And my jingle-jangle translation:
>Everything in your abode,
>all your honey, milk and grain,
>you can't take it on the road
>when it's time to go meet death.
As an exercise in trying to come to grips with Irish metrics, I tried to
reproduce this in English verse (how is that for a futile thing to do?!)
I used English rhyme to replace Irish rhyme (which is just plain
cheating really). What we need is seven syllables per line, end rhyme in
lines (a), (b) and (d), and 'aicill' rhyme between lines (c) and (d).
Here is what I came up with:
Everything you have inside
honey, milk, and grain besides,
can’t go with you on the road
From your abode when you have died.
The rhyme in line (b) is very weak. And I had to cheat a bit with the
syllable count in line (d). And then I remembered that the end rhymes
have to be monosyllables anyway! So I tried:
Everything you have at home
corn and milk and honey comb
Can’t go with you on the path
When to meet with death you roam.
The 'aicill' rhyme (path : death) is only a half rhyme, so that's no
good. You could get a full rhyme by changing 'path' to 'street' (:
meet), but that sounds a bit too modern. And the last line is very weak
anyway; he isn't 'roaming', he's heading straight for death.
So I compromised badly on the rhyme in line (b):
Everything stored in your room
Grain and milk and honey comb,
Can’t be carried by you when
You go, o men, to meet your doom.
And then I decided to add alliteration to every line, and linking
alliteration between lines (c) and (d) to complement the 'aicill' rhyme.
Just to show off!
Everything you set in store,
Milk and honey, grain and more,
Can’t be carried by you when,
You walk, my friend, to find death’s door.
Now that I've got that off my chest; where did you find this Dennis? Are
there poems from Laud 615 that have been edited somewhere? (Not the
first one I hope!)
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